Dear Angela Rose,

As you continue in your endeavors in being a writer, developing and refining your skills, I have a few heartfelt suggestions for you that I think might support you on your path. You are great at developing pathos in your work.  You have lived a full life up until now, and have many more rich experiences to share and draw from, which you do well. As a way to enhance your work and to relate to the reader on diverse levels, I would suggest that you think about the main nugget of information or wisdom that you are trying to convey.  Really work with that, to untangle it and tease it out into more diverse ideas. What I'm saying is that you do well with coming from a personal perspective, but it's time you try to come from an empathetic perspective as well.  Where are your readers coming from?  Who are they? Who do they relate to in their culture, community and society.  Drawing from voices and statistics and credible voices in the community will be helpful to bulk up the credibility of your points. So, in other words, do more research, really sit with the nugget and see what other ideas are there that can support it, more than just your own personal account.  Brainstorm, map it out.  You are creative, you are a good big picture thinker, and just taking a few moments before diving into your usual stream of consciousness writing style, pause, and you may have to wobble there for a moment.  You may have to go in and out of your own experience, and somewhere in it all you may find a flow that connects your voice to other credible, attractive arguments.